Fallen angel : an experiment.


I


A fallen angel touched earth

foetal within her wings cradling her form

the last decent thing nature gifted her

The earth touched her

a bier for her monstrous shape

already coalescing into dust

stiff like grains of sand

her divinity stolen by an ordinary gust

and named her a martyr blessed a saint

The moist earth embraced her

even as heaven turned away

not missing the absent alleluia
the silent hosanna in the highest

even as lucifer raised his first symphony
a dirge and welcomed another demon home


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II


Lucifer welcomes another demon home
He raises a symphony a dirge to
juxtapose the silent hosanna in
the highest the absent alleluia missing
as heaven turns away
The moist earth embraces her
names her a saint blessed a martyr
but an ordinary gust steals her divinity
Stiff like a grain of sand coalescing
into dust a bier for her monstrous shape
The earth touches her nature gifts her
a last decent thing her form cradled
within her wings touched by earth
a fallen angel


I am still experimenting as usual. What I did this time was take a poem and turn it upside down in other to create a mirror-like effect. My aim is to see if meaning will change from one poem to the next even though their basic context remains the same. Do you think I achieved this?

📷: @warpedpoetic


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03.12.2019 08:29
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How you keep putting out this sort of work I'll never know. Nailed it, again.

03.12.2019 09:44
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Thank you sir. I just write as my spirit leads. I really can't say how it comes

03.12.2019 12:39
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Probably doesn't matter as long as it's there. Nice work.

03.12.2019 12:43
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Yeah. Thanks sir.

03.12.2019 12:46
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Great. You nailed it.

03.12.2019 12:40
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Thanks sir.

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